Well, not really redeemed, just redirected with a few word changes.
I wrote this while I was schmoozing my wife. We met on the internet and dated long distance between Dallas (me) and Houston (her) for about a year. I finally had to move my fanny down here and marry the girl up. Second best decision of my life.
I MADE that girl love me. She didn't have a chance.
She told me later it was my (prolific) poyms that got her. And that I'm unreasonably good lookin'. 
Now this poym means a great OTHER deal to me:
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The Tide
The first wave hit me and leveled me down
The next wave came and I thought I would drown
He washed over me like the incoming tide
He just kept coming till I smothered and died
I flat on the beach, each wave still advanced
O’er and under my body, back and forth they danced
The sand washed out and rushed back as I tarried
In no time at all I was totally buried
The more that I struggled, the tighter it bound
Helpless, encased, no air, no sound
Cut off from the world, it’s distracting appeal
Entombed in His love, there was no repeal
It happened so sudden, I fainted, I numbed
Without a defense, I so quickly succumbed
To the unending onslaught like light from the skies
Of the grace and the beauty of His sight in my eyes
TS
4-14-‘99
PS: See? You can sing love songs to HP. If you sing like me ... keep it in the car.
Good for me. I can sing "ungodly" loud there. 